Wednesday April 30, 2008 I believe that I clearly presenteda need for action by showing that there was wasted money going into the death penalty. My action specifically told the audience to go to the talley center, and help out with the petition, and also to vote. I told them excactly what was needed from them.I believe that i had pretty good lingustics and had a pretty good rythem. The audicne seemed energized after my speech.
Zach did a great job of showing us that there is a risk to those people who do have food allergies. The actions of boycotting specific companies, and making them put a label on certain foods were good specific actions. He was very persuasive to me, and made me want to boycot these companies who did now show us what kind of food they were producing. He also did a great job of energizing the audience.
Reviewed By:JOnathan Betts
Cait had a good introduction that got my attention, and did a good job of getting everyones attention. She had many specific actions that she proposed for us to do like telling us to boycott the fast food industries that are unhealthy. She did a great job of persuading me to eat less fast food, and made it so that i do not want to eat from many places. She made a good point of telling us how we needed to expose these dangers, and demand healthy better food.I thouhgt she did a very good job of energizing the audience.
Reviewed by: Jonathan Betts
Overall I think Will did a great job on his speech. He demostrated the hurt caused by college basketball by the NBA age rule, he talked about how the athletes suffer as students and stating that they will have nothing to fall back on. He also described his attitude toward the NBA age rule , taking a negative stand, because the young players may not be physically or mentally ready for the pros. The action he proposed was very specific. He specified dates and times of when the protest was going on. He used strong persuasive strategies and he argued for his solution well. He did a good job using evidence to support his solution and he talked about the positive effects of raising the NBA age rule by a few years. He motivated me to want to take action by mentioning how effective the boycott would be, since the game is held on national TV, and that because the UNC game is one of the biggest games of our schedule. Will also did a good job of making the mood serious and motivating the audience by telling that the student body has a lot of power, by bringing the message closer to home. He connected with the audience by mentioning one of our very own star players at State who has declared signing up for the draft. The style of delivery was a style with urgency and a serious tone, with a strong delivery of opinion and fact, in order to motivate the audience to a specific action. Once again, I enjoyed listening to Wills speech and I thought he did a good job!!
Jason Sweeney
Posted by jasweene ( Apr 27 2008, 11:41:28 PM EDT ) Permalink Comments [0]Reviewer: Doniece
Person Reviewed: Leslie
Your introduction was great and your attention device really got my attention. Your provided gret reasons for why over population is harmful and the negative affects of over crowding. You used transitions between main ideas very well and they were very obvious when moving from one idea to the next. Your gestures aided in your speech and you used a good tone, volume, and eye contact with the audience. You provided a resolving action and reasons why it would benefit your cause which made me want to get involved in your cause. Also your statement, "What college student doesn't like sweets" helped you really connect with the audience and get them to pay more attention to what you were trying to say. You also provided great reasons for why your plans would be effective and help the community. Your conclusion was great and used the three R's effectively. In doing so you left me and most likey the entire audience with a feeling, positive or negative, that would make me want to get involved with your plan. Overall, yur speech flowed well and it was easy to follow . I think you did very well in presenting the information and providing a great resolvoing action to over crowding. I really took interest in your topic and I think you did great!
Posted by debolds ( Apr 26 2008, 09:11:28 PM EDT ) Permalink Comments [0]Reviewer: Doniece Bolds
Person Recviewed: Johnathon Betts
Topic: Death Penalty
To begin with, your attention device was a little shaky at first, but you pulled it together and successfully got your point across. Next time try to be more direct with what your trying to say and use appropriate language when addressing your audience. Your transition to your introduction was great. You listed what was going to be discussed and succesfully illustrated your topics. Transitions from one main idea to the next wee very evident and clear. Your use of examples to support your claims were diverse and very good. You used statistics and hypothetical situations to create this illustration for your audience. Your posture was great and I just want to suggest that you try not to rock from side to side because it can be a bit distracting and cause the audience to lose focus. Your eye contact was food and you spoke in a great volume and tone. Throughout your paper you got a bit tongue tied probably due to nerves,and I was not quite sure of what you were saying or what your resolving action was, but in the end you pulled it together. To avoid this happening, try to pause and take a deep breath so you can relax and focus and what message your trying to relay to your audience. During your conclusion you should try practicing the three R's. Restating your attention device would have provided for a great ending and it willo give your audience something to think about after the speech has concluded. This will also leave them feeling some kind of emotion or want to take up an action which is great for a call to action speech.
Posted by debolds ( Apr 26 2008, 08:59:36 PM EDT ) Permalink Comments [0]